The chart below shows the number of trips made by children in one country in 1990 and 2010 to travel to and from school using different modes of transport. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates data about the Underground station passenger count during different times of
a
day in London.
Correct article usage
the
Overall
, The passenger count fluctuated according to
the time with early morning and late night hours
have
low Wrong verb form
having
passengers
, while
the morning and the evening hours
are the busiest.
At 6 am the station opens with 100 passengers
and quickly doubles its figure in one hour. The number of passengers
rapidly increases to 400 by 8 am. Following
this
, there was a drastic decline in the people
for the Correct quantifier usage
number of people
next
two hours
, reaching under 200 passengers
by 10 am.Next
, the travellers
increased considerably till 2pm Correct quantifier usage
number of travellers
where
the number was 300.
Correct word choice
when
Then
, for the next
two hours
the Add a comma
,hours
passengers
travelling by metro Correct quantifier usage
number of passengers
declines
rapidly to 100. Wrong verb form
declined
Subsequently
, the traveller count surges till 6pm reaching a value of just under 400. After that, despite falling to just above 100 at 8pm, the figure increases slightly in the next
hour. Finally
, it decreases slightly to just under 150 by 22 hours
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