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Nowadays, young people admire media and sports stars though they often do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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The younger generation
are having
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is having
 great admiration for media and sport
celebrities
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celebrities, although
although
 they are not perfect role models to follow. In my view,
this
 could be seen as detrimental. From one standpoint, emulating famous entertainment stars might spark changing patterns of fashion and
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
 among young adults who are not mature enough to judge what is suitable within their society. As
matter
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a matter
 of fact, they show a propensity for copying what those stars say or do on TV, even if their actions go against the cultural value of some localities. Regarding fashion, the way Dam Vinh Hung, who is a renowned Vietnamese singer, dresses would be the onset of a modern yet rather unacceptable trend of fashion with exposed skin. Unfortunately, the young have yet to understand the long-term shortcomings of
such
 a trend to
traditional way
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the traditional way
 of dressing which values the beauty and elegance of clothes
such
 as the
Ao
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A
Dai
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Day
.
Additionally
,
such
 reverence for celebrities in the field of entertainment would possibly cause a detriment to social security under certain circumstances. A typical example of
this
 is the chaos during and after Korean singers and musical bands’ show in Vietnam a few years ago when the crowd of fans went uncontrollable, which caused irritation for the locals and
also
danger
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a danger
 to the fans themselves.
Furthermore
, if their idols were criticized due to their scandals, they would try to
sugar-coat
coat with something sweet, such as a hard sugar glaze
sugarcoat
suffocate
 the situation or even trigger arguments.
This
 would be really challenging for authorities
to maintain
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maintain
 security. In conclusion, I suppose the phenomenon that young people idolize media and sport celebrated individuals who are notorious in some aspects is negative.
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