Some people warn that era of the silver screen is coming to an end and that people will lose interest in going to the cinema. Do you agree or diagree with this view.

It is often thought that it is more a
dventageous
giving an advantage
advantageous
advantages
to watch movies more than going to the cinema. I c
ompeletely
to a complete degree or to the full or entire extent
completely
agree with
this
opinion and think that satisfaction is much more important.
First
of all, I believe that self satisfaction gives people a sense of f
ullfilment
a feeling of satisfaction at having achieved your desires
fulfilment
that no other things can g
urantee.
give surety or assume responsibility
guarantee
In other words
, you will feel more comfortable watching at
home
more than cinema. Cinemas are the public area, that you have to watch movies with a specific time schedule. While
home
is your personal space, and can d
o
engage in
make
your own schedule.
For instance
, at
h
ome you
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home, you
can watch movies or shows by paying a month rent, and it is a lot cheaper than watching at the movie theatres. That's why o
verwhelming majority
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the overwhelming majority
an overwhelming majority
of people are starting to lose their interest of c
inema.
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the cinema
Secondly
, people started to pay more attention to their education.
Moreover
, by watching shows regularly, you can improve your knowledge. Listening and reading the subtitles are the best way to learn foreign languages.
For example
, I started to learn e
nglish
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
at school from the
third
grade. Growing up older, i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
watched a lot of movies and serials. And it helped me to improve my language skill and learn new words. And
also
you can make better your accent. For
this
reason, i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
prefer to watch movies, serials and shows by computer at
home
, more than cinemas. To sum up, I strongly believe that self satisfactions i
s
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are
more beneficial and a
dventageous
giving an advantage
advantageous
advantages
because it makes people comfortable and motivated.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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