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In some countries, university students live at home with their families while they study in the same city, whereas, in other countries they live away from home while they study in another city. Do the benefits of living away from home outweigh the disadvantages?

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Living with families and
study
 in the same
city
 and live away from home and
study
 in another
city
 are depend on the situation.
Study
 away from home has its own advantages and disadvantages. As of those, who think that
study
 in another
city
 far from family is an advantage, they feel
this
 way because they get an environment of
study
.
For instance
, a research
last
 year found that 50% of semi-urban students move to another place as they lack of the good environment for
study
 and opportunity.
In addition
, they believe that in another
city
 they may have an opportunity to communicate with students from various places. A fantastic example of
this
 is, a boy from Odisha came to Kolkata for higher
study
 and learned Bengali and became a Bengali short story writer.
In contrast
, other people hold the notion that living away family to
study
 in another place is expensive.
For example
, the cost of living in Mumbai is higher than Kolkata.
Moreover
, sometimes students are not able to bear the cost and leave the
study
. More specifically, costing of MBA at Mumbai including food, commute and other expenses was 25,000 rupees per month in 2015. Nowadays the room rent and the cost of living in Mumbai on the increase, which cannot bear by a student. Apart from that, a student may face language barriers.
For example
, students from English speaking countries may face
language problem
Suggestion
a language problem
 where English is not a language of communication. Advantages of disadvantages of
study
 away is depend on the
city
, country, course and lifestyle you choose.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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