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CAR OWNERSHIP HAS INCREASED SO RAPIDLY OVER THE PAST THIRTY YEARS THAT MAY CITIES IN THE WORLD ARE NOW 'ONE BIG TRAFFIC JAM'. HOW TRUE DO YOU THINK THIS STATEMENT IS ? WHAT MEASURES CAN GOVERNMENTS TAKE TO DISCOURAGE PEOPLE FROM USING THEIR CARS?

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Nowadays, a car has become a basic necessity of man. All the households have at least one vehicle.
This
 caused due to the increased standard of living of people, and simultaneously the automobiles becoming more affordable to humans.
This
has lead
Suggestion
has led
 to increased
traffic
 congestion in all major cities around the world. In
this
 essay, we will discuss how car ownership has made the
traffic
 terrible.
Also
, we will see some measures that the government could take to discourage the public from using private cars for their basic needs. The development in science relating to car manufacturing leads to the production of low cost, affordable cars to the middle class.
Thus
 the car’s number increases drastically. Even when the car’s count increased, the respective governments failed to upgrade the road infrastructure. For the same street size, the number of cars is more.
In
Suggestion
During
 evening hours it takes hours to travel even a small distance due to dense
traffic
. Improving the transport infrastructure and public transit system is the best method by which the government
cant
can not
can't
 deter the public from using private cars. If people feel more ease in
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 by
public system
Suggestion
the public system
 gradually more people will prefer public transportation, and in a long way, the
traffic
 could be reduced significantly.
In addition
 to
this
, people should be educated regarding the benefits of using public transport. Another method is to impose a hefty tax on private cars. I think it is correct to consider many cities around the world as ‘one big
traffic
 jam.’ In
this
 essay, we
also
 discussed various methods the government can take to discourage people from using their cars.
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