Many people today are spending more and more time travelling to work or school. Some people believe this is a negative development while others think there are benefits to spending a long time travelling to work or school. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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We are living in a busy world.Nowadays

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most of the people spend major part of their day in travels to school or workplaces. Some people argue that spending more

time

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in travel is a good practice while others disagree with it.

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points

of view as well as

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explain why less journey hour

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are

important. In the present era a majority of people believe that spending more

time

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in travelling to work or school is good practice

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There are two arguments behind

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thought.

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during the journey we will meet new persons and

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will give a chance to develop new relationships and

there by

by that means or because of that

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improve the social behaviour.

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example if

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example, if

we are travelling in a bus or train we can meet different

culture

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cultural

people and we can get a chance to learn new culture or language

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The

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argument is spending more hours in

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helping

to reduce the mental strength.These people believe that during the travel

time

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people can completely forget about their family tension and job related tension. On other hand Spending more

time

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in travelling has several drawbacks.

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, it will adversely affect physical and mental health. People travelling long

distance

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for work become weak due to lack of sleep and proper diet. A recent survey conducted in India reveals the fact that 50 % of people travelling long

distance

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had

diabetes problem

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diabetes problems

a diabetes problem

due to lack of exercise.

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students who used to go long

distance

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spend more

time

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journey

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the journey

a journey

rather than studies will

result poor performance

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result in poor performance

in academics.

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these people will not get proper interval to spend with their families and it will

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affect

their family relationships. In conclusion travelling huge

distance

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have higher negative

side especially

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side, especially

in physical health compared to its positive side. So it is better to travel small

distance

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for work and studies and stay healthy.

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Many people today are spending more and more time travelling to work or school. Some people believe this is a negative development while others think there are benefits to spending a long time travelling to work or school. Discuss both views and give your opinion

Your opinion

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