Both the poor and the rich find the accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree

Some people believe that getting a university seat is very difficult for both poor and rich people
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But I do not quite agree with
this
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According to my opinion
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it is very easy for a child who belongs to
affluent family
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an affluent family
affluent families
to get admitted to good universities while compared to poor children.
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the various factors
supporting for
this
argument.
To begin
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being born in a wealthy family is a boon.
Firstly in
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Firstly, in
the present era people from affluent family can easily achieve everything
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including a university seat by money and influence.
For example
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nowadays
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almost all universities reserve 15% of their seats for NRI people or people ready to give a high amount of capitulation fees
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The children from rich
families thereby
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families, thereby
get a chance to choose their favourite course without even appearing for an entrance exam.
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affluent family members always have
good relationship
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a good relationship
good relationships
with politicians or other high society members so it is easy for them to utilize these contacts for
recommendation
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recommendations
the recommendation
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Conversely
child
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a child
from poor family background
always strive
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always strives
for admission.
First
reason there is no reservation for poor students in
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some
universities. Students have to successfully complete their entrance exam in order to get admission in
education institution
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educational institutions
educational institution
an educational institution
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a recent Survey conducted in India reveals the fact that 50% college dropouts were from low financial background family. To recapitulate
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the people from poor families always depend on their scholarship for studies
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while wealthy students can get number of choice only because of their money.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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