ordinary people try to copy famous people either reading magazine or watching TV.Why do they do it .D you think it is a good ides to copy famous people.

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era television and newspaper have a great influence on common people's life. Ordinary people always try to copy eminent personalities when they are appearing on TV or magazines. I strongly believe it is not all appreciable
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Famous personalities are always present in different TV shows or
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especially
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teenagers always try to mirror famous personalities because of two main reasons
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Young people believe that if they emulate the eminent personalities
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particularly
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film stars they will
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become
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a short time span
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a majority of youngsters in India
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mirroring eminent personalities behaviour will
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success in their life. Because of these irrelevant thoughts most of the young people try to follow famous personalities life style.
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excessive copying tendency will result high physical and mental health related problems. A recent survey
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conducted in India reveals that
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in 2015 30 % of teenage girls
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These surgeries adversely affect their physical health
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mirroring behaviour sometimes leads to poor school attendance and will result in bad academic performance which
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it is better to believe yourself for success rather than copying other 's behaviour.TV and newspapers are projecting only positive side of the success and always try to hide the bad side from
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