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some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoo. While others think that zoos are both entertaining and ecologically important. Discuss both views.

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In
this
 modern world, perspective of how to keep animals are varied between people, some people think about
caging
to make a rush at or sudden attack upon, as in battle
charging
 them in zoos or forests while others think it is illogical to limit animal's movements. I am going to discuss these views according to environmental, personal and economic perspective. Keeping some animals in zoos will protect them against predators, bad weather, and food availability.
Nevertheless
, keeping animals is more logical than isolating them because if we keep animals caged, they would not be able to have fresh air and chase other animals.
Therefore
, it is cruel keeping animals confined in small spaces. It is advisable to put our efforts into keeping our creatures in their natural habitats, in order to get a luggage bag you should call the reception prior to notice. Keeping animals is essential because some animals are becoming extinct.
Although
 keeping these animals is costly, the profits made by these animals are substantial. Take Indian lion
for example
, a wide range of people travels to India to see these animals in circuses in India.
However
, some people think that governments should invest money in improving the infrastructure of their nations
instead
. Building new electrical power station,
for instance
, is more important than spending thousands of pounds to preserve certain creatures from extinction.
Lastly
, keeping animals is important to study and research, whereas others think we have no right to use animals for entertainment and in labs. To conclude, keeping animals in zoos might have many values, but it is irrational to keep these animals away from natural habitat. The reasons are
besides
 they are not vulnerable creatures, they have the right to survive independently because of having feelings and emotions as human.
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