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Nowadays consumer goods have become the most important part of people’s lives. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Consumer goods have taken immense importance in developing and shaping human lives currently. In
this
 fast moving era, we cannot imagine our lifestyle without these capital goods, they are providing communication facilities, jobs, help businesses and countries to thrive economically and socially. I agree with the fact that there are more pros to
this
 than cones.
Firstly
, let me shed some light on the disadvantages of technology. Due to the innovation of technology in various
sectors personal
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sectors, personal
 data of everyone
is
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are
 easily accessible; which has lead to an increase in online crimes. If we look at the data of online frauds it is increased rapidly in the recent 4 years.
On the other hand
, there are uncountable benefits that humankind is enjoying due to consumer items. Different modes of communication have made personal and professional
life
 easier. Now
mostly
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most
 businesses are based on technology and are fully dependant on different items like laptops, phones, cameras, infrastructure and many more; All these products help businesses
to flourish
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flourish
 globally. Manufacturing these goods requires different industries and supporting
infra which
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infra, which
 creates job opportunities in many industrial sectors and help individuals to work and help his/her family to live a good
life
.
Additionally
, there are many
such
 goods which are part of our day to day
life
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life, such
such
 as food, apparel, footwear, fuel, medicines, house, etc. All these items are
essential part
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an essential part
 of individual
life
 and without these we cannot imagine how things will work. In conclusion, I would like to say that looking at the numerous number of facilities and opportunities that consumer products are providing worldwide; disadvantages can be considered as
resonable
showing reason or sound judgment
reasonable
 issues which can be solved.
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