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Some Parents buy their children a large number of toys to play with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys?

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Although
 many parents are buying numerous toys for their children for playing with seems adorable,
this
 trend seems to have several drawbacks and benefits. On the one hand, there are a few demerits,
firstly
, when children have many toys, they lose interest in older toys and break them,
thus
 it is a waste of money in buying new ones until older is broken.
For instance
, it has been witnessed especially in rich and middle class families, parents buying new toys out of love for their children, end up giving away in charity.
Secondly
, after fulfilling demands of a
child
 can spoil them, while growing, they learn to ask for unnecessary things and if not provided, parents have to face serious consequences.
Such
 as, crying loudly and crawling on the streets, which creates embarrassments for parents.
Finally
, while children are always engaged in playing, mostly study is ignored, and continuity in lack of studies can make a
child
 academically weak.
On the other hand
, there are merits of buying playthings
to begin
 with, simply playing with toys, the
child
's creativity and imagination develop in real life.
For example
, building blocks play improves
child
’s imagination from constructing houses, bridge, and garden to museums.
Additionally
, the
child
 is
further
 indulged in the play, which helps them to invite more friends,
hence
 learn from each other. Like, children play teacher and students or Doctor and patient game,
thus
 real life characters are played and they learn a lot from
such
 experiences.
Moreover
, from the childhood, their dreams an enthusiastic future goal.
For Instance
, while playing with aeroplane, the
child
 wishes to be a pilot one day,
this
 way it helps to shape their prospects. In conclusion, buying plentiful toys have both drawbacks and benefits, if not dealt with proper guidance or keeping certain goals in view; parents can make or spoil children unknowingly.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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