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The way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. Has this become a positive or negative development?

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Undeniably,
communication
 with others comprises of
very essential aspect
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a very essential aspect
 of life. Thereby any alterations in
way
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the way
 an individual
Communication
 has been
arised
located or moved above the surround or above the normal position
raised
 because of modern
technology
Although
, various advantages are associated with newly communicating
technology
, but some negatives are
also
 linked which cannot be overlooked. Discussing the
first
 positive impact is applications
in
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of
 social media has revolutionised the way of
communication
. Reason is now a days masses living in overseas nations can stay connected instantly with their family members or kiths through audio or video conference which definitely eliminates homesickness among people. Apart from
this
,
increasingly
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increased
increasing
increase
 usage of
internet
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the internet
 encourage the person to share their opinion openly with others.
Therefore
, a good effect Will be witnessed with the usage of
technology
 in
right manner
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the right manner
 On the flip side, some bad impacts
are
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also relate
also
 related to it. Reason behind it is interacting face to face within individuals have been abandoning increasingly and
multitudes especially
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multitudes, especially
 young
generation decreasing
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generation, decreasing
communication
 personally and
conversating
change from one system to another or to a new plan or policy
converting
 through
web
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the web
 or modern gadgets. One good example
for
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of
this
 view is nearby 63% of
total population
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the total population
was
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were
 highly
concerned regards
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concerned with regards
 to usage of cell phone by children taken them away from interacting personally With their friends, a study conducted by NIAS
corportation
a business firm whose articles of incorporation have been approved in some state
corporation
Corportation
.
Thus
, negatively affects of
technology
 should not be ignored. To conclude, it can be restated that each coin has two sides
therefore
 using recent
communication
 devices have some useful as well as some drawbacks which must be
take
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taken
 care of.

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