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Should government make decisions about people's life style, or should people make their own decisions.

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With the advent of globalization, the lifestyle of the people has changed a lot. Earlier, people used to think before doing anything suspicious. But today, the
society
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 is becoming spontaneous without rethinking the consequences of their doing. In order to control the situation,
government
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the government
 can play a major role in controlling the scenario and lifestyle of the
society
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. There are numerous of initiatives that governments can take to eradicate the ill practices from the
society
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.
For example
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, youngsters are hypnotized by the drugs unknowingly the consequences of it.
However
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, the
ramifcations
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ramifications
 of the intake of drugs are
fatal but
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fatal, but
 they allured by it and it has reached to the epidemic. Like, Ministry of Social Justice and Empowerment, Government of India, has introduced a national toll-free helpline number for the drug abuse victims, their family and the
society
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 at large.
This
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 initiative is helping not only the individual but
also
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 his family who is the major sufferer. Young people from the developing countries are indulging themselves
into
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in
 crime because of
lack
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the lack
 of employment opportunities. National authorities should intervene so that not only an
individual but
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individual, but
 an economy can grow as a whole. Successful
individual leads
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individual, leads
 to
growing nation
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the growing nation
a growing nation
 because they are the one's who take economy to another level. To conclude,
government
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the government
 and people can equally help in making the better lifestyle. Productive and constructive decisions will benefit everyone.
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