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Nowadays people use social media to keep in touch with others and be aware of the news. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #media #touch #news #outweigh
Firstly
, I do think that the advantages of
this
 outweigh the disadvantages and I will gladly explain. Starting with the fact that social
media
 saved us so much time, money and effort you may ask how
for example
 when I said time let's say you are a student in the UK but your family lives in KSA and you want to check on them every day back in 1995 going to a public phone stand was your only way that means every day you would need to go to a public call centre just to have one call with you family, friends and even your kids. But nowadays, you do not need to go through all
this
 trouble just to have one phone call on social
media
 you can have as many as you like without stepping out of your house.
Secondly
, how does social
media
 affect positively saving your money, well I have a lot of examples
such
 as your childhood friend is studying in the USA and can not come back until he gets his degree before social
media
 we would have been buying plane tickets for only a short visit but now we do not need to do all that with social
media
 we can call them, text them and even share photos with them every day at every time.
Lastly
, there are disadvantages and we should be aware of them
such
 as hackers, online bullying and so much more
hence
,
the
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despite the
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 small number of disadvantages social
media
 is a great way to stay in touch with others and be aware of the news more easily than before.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Instant communication
  • Geographical separation
  • Vital sources
  • Global events
  • Networking opportunities
  • Interpersonal relationships
  • Digital interactions
  • Misinformation
  • Misiformed public opinions
  • Endanger
  • Excessive use
  • Addiction
  • Mental health
  • Anxiety
  • Depression
  • Loneliness
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