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Some countries are struggling with increases in crime rates. Some believe that having more police on the streets is best way to reduce and combat crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People prefer to traditional methods of schooling have been changed after the introduction of computers and the internet. There are some advocates argue that homeschooling has many advantages than going regular school education;
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, there remain some arguments. In my opinion, I strongly, believe that homeschooling would enable children to learn more academic and non academic subjects in details.
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 of all, by spending a large amount of time with family, they would understand how to carry out their family responsibilities; family budgeting, maintaining relationships and tolerate others. In other word
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 prepare them to encounter real life experience. Take finance as an example, students understand that value of money and how much hard work required to secure money. Eventually, these students never spend money unnecessarily.
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, school going students rarely recognises these kind of information. Yet, another point is to consider here is that, learners can focus on their interested field more deeply, whereas the subject which find difficult can be assisted by either parents or by the help of experts. Having focused subject which enjoys, students would acquire a vast and in depth knowledge,
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 can lead them to conduct research on that particular topic later in their life, rather studying all subjects, including subjects nothing to do with a child's interest.
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, child prodigies who can channelize their education according to their talents:
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, music, dance
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and painting. By way of conclusion, even though people have different opinion on homeschooling, I again reaffirm that,
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 method of teaching definitely give more and more child prodigies to the world.
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