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Wealthy countries should accept more refugees and provide them with basic assistance, such as food and housing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that rich nations around the
world
 should take care of
war
 affected migrants with basic amenities like food and shelter.
This
 essay agrees with
this
 idea because it is
inhuman
lacking and reflecting lack of pity or compassion
inhumane
 to keep affected people of other countries in barbarous conditions of refugee camps or jail while these people have the potential to be the active workforce of wealthy countries. When people are bound to seek assistance to get rid of the
war
 or riots
that is
 going on in their home countries, developed countries should respond positively.
First
world
everything that exists anywhere
World
 nations are capable of providing shelter or food for the
war
 affected refugees. If anyone is capable of helping others in their need, humanity should act to provide assistance to those who are helpless. Historically, we have seen a lot of wars and numerous count of refugee migration from the affected countries to rich countries.
For example
,
war
 affected people
from
Suggestion
of
 Syria are currently seeking protection in Canada and
Canada government
Accept comma addition
Canada, government
 with all Canadians are now ready to sponsor families of Syria. Rich countries often have
shortage
Suggestion
a shortage
shortages
 in the active workforce. Refugees from around the
world
 are of different professions, and they are capable of filling the shortage
on
Suggestion
of
 employees in different fields. When developed nations integrate immigrants with care into the mainstream resource pool, they will surely be benefited with
further
 growth.
For example
, Japan and Russia have negative birth rate and each year they are falling short on active workforce. They can take policy to accept refugees and in turn fill the void in the field force. In conclusion,
war
 affected immigrants should be welcomed by
first
world
 countries because it would be
inhuman
lacking and reflecting lack of pity or compassion
inhumane
 to keep people in
vulnerable state
Suggestion
a vulnerable state
vulnerable states
 and
also
 immigrants can contribute to the economic growth of hosting country.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Refugees
  • Asylum seekers
  • Humanitarian aid
  • Integration
  • Multiculturalism
  • Economic impact
  • Public services
  • International law
  • Conventions relating to the status of refugees
  • Labor market
  • Cultural enrichment
  • Burden-sharing
  • Resettlement programs
  • Host country
  • Border security
  • Comprehensive policy
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