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nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. What are the the reasons? Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

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In modern
society
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, there has been a major concern that many couples have delayed parenthood. Some explanations for
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 social
trend
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 will be put forward, before an analysis of its impacts on
society
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 and family life is given. A few reasons can be given to justify the
trend
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 of giving birth at later stages of life.
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, the labour market is increasingly competitive, and it is a norm that young parents defer having children to devote the whole time in the
first
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 years of their employment to lay a sound foundation for their future career.
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, it is believed that children are raised better by older parents.
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 seems valid due to the fact that older fathers and mothers are generally wealthier, more experienced, and more willing to take the responsibility of bringing up a child. The
trend
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 exerts both advantageous and disadvantageous
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influences
 on
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 and families. On the one hand, children born to more prosperous and experienced parents can receive better and more comprehensive education, and
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 contribute more to
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 when they grow up. In each household, the parents may
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 reap the benefits of
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trend
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, as their
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 working years are not interrupted by pregnancy and childcare.
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, when an aged couple
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decides
 to give birth, there are serious health risks for the woman in the prenatal and postnatal period. If any complicated maternal health problem arises, the life whole family would be turned upside down. To conclude, the tendency to have children at later ages is caused by a number of factors,
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 as the competitiveness of the job market for young adults, and both the positive and negative impacts of it can be seen in families and
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.

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