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International travel is becoming cheaper and more countries are opening their doors to increase the number of tourists. Do the advantages of increasing tourism outweigh the disadvantages?

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Travelling globally is getting low in price and a number of nations welcoming travellers in order to promote
tourism
.
This
 essay will discuss that the advantages of increasing
tourism
 outweigh the drawbacks.
This
 essay
will
Accept comma addition
will, firstly
firstly
, denote that
tourism
 contributes
in
Suggestion
to
 a
country
's
economy
 and it brings many opportunities for locals followed by an analysis of how the primary drawback namely, inflation is not valid with a reasoned conclusion. The foremost contribution by
tourism
 industry is that it helps boosting the
economy
 of a
country
. As in the more visitors come to a
country
 will ultimately aid in generating more revenue and financial stability.
For instance
, Malaysia ’s
economy
 is mainly dependent on
tourism
 and the fiscal benefits that get from it,
then
 spend on the development of their
country
.
Secondly
, it assists in creating a lot more job opportunities for the local residents that eventually minimized the unemployment rate as the host
country
 make it possible to serve better in terms of
hotels
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hotel
hotel's
 facilities and other recreational activities.
However
, a disadvantage of progressive
tourism
 may be price hiking. The sellers of the host
country
rise
raise the level or amount of something
raise
 their prices when there is a tourist season in order to get more profit that may not bother tourists but it costs more to the locals.
For example
, in Egypt local sellers fluctuate prices on their own depending upon how many visitors they have at that moment which is unfair to the residential community. In the end,
tourism
 industry is growing very fast in a number of countries around the world.
This
 growth has advantages like
boost
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a boost
the boost
 in
economy
 and providing more work opportunities that completely outweigh the drawback of price hike.
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