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Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Why you think this is case? What effects this has on individuals and society in general?

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Perhaps the major reason we need to deal with is rising of fast
paced lifestyle. Owi
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a fast paced lifestyle
ng to hectic schedule, people could find barely spare time these days.
That is
 why, they can n
ot be i
can not
cannot
nterested in the hobbies. A
second
 issue, presumably, is the competitions related to professional sports and music which require sophisticated ability and effort. As it is known, today approximately all contests are bound to money- business.
This
 is inevitably leads
peop
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leading
led
le to change their minds about hobbies. The
third
 place, belief and traditional rules, responsibilities would play another significant role in falling down of propensity for hobbies. Notwithstanding world is quickly, there are still some countries governed with
reli
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by
gious laws,
such
 as Iran Islam Rebuplic. In these countries, inhabitants are forbidden to do several activities they want.
Last
 of all, human being by their vary
natu
used as an intensifier
very
re are inclined to compete with others and defeat to show their power.
As a result
, some of them who intended only to participate to re
cr
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in
eation force to give up. The effects of
this
 have been and will continue to be serious.
First
 of all, since people have no interest in the hobbies, they are unable to go up their motivation. According to recent research, leisure activities have a substantial positive impact on people's life and character.
In addition
, not having hobbies would bring about both mental and physical health issues. To cope with these problems,
such
 as stress, obesity, people must have a spare time and join clubs. In su
m
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To
up, it is evident that there are a few causes of reluctant to hobbies, and
also
 a variety of effects of
this
. Unless proper attention is paid to hobbies, these problems will remain unresolved.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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