Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Why you think this is case? What effects this has on individuals and society in general?

Perhaps the major reason we need to deal with is rising of fast
paced lifestyle. Owi
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a fast paced lifestyle
ng to hectic schedule, people could find barely spare time these days.
That is
why, they can n
ot be i
can not
cannot
nterested in the hobbies. A
second
issue, presumably, is the competitions related to professional sports and music which require sophisticated ability and effort. As it is known, today approximately all contests are bound to money- business.
This
is inevitably leads
peop
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leading
led
le to change their minds about hobbies. The
third
place, belief and traditional rules, responsibilities would play another significant role in falling down of propensity for hobbies. Notwithstanding world is quickly, there are still some countries governed with
reli
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by
gious laws,
such
as Iran Islam Rebuplic. In these countries, inhabitants are forbidden to do several activities they want.
Last
of all, human being by their vary
natu
used as an intensifier
very
re are inclined to compete with others and defeat to show their power.
As a result
, some of them who intended only to participate to re
cr
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in
eation force to give up. The effects of
this
have been and will continue to be serious.
First
of all, since people have no interest in the hobbies, they are unable to go up their motivation. According to recent research, leisure activities have a substantial positive impact on people's life and character.
In addition
, not having hobbies would bring about both mental and physical health issues. To cope with these problems,
such
as stress, obesity, people must have a spare time and join clubs. In su
m
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To
up, it is evident that there are a few causes of reluctant to hobbies, and
also
a variety of effects of
this
. Unless proper attention is paid to hobbies, these problems will remain unresolved.
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