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it is generally believed that success in fields such as arts and sports can only be achieved if a person has natural talent. However ,its sometimes claimed that any child can be thought to become a good sports person or artist. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is a universally acceptable idea that only individuals who are naturally gifted in the path of art and sport can achieve excellence,
although
 some are of the opinion that a
child
 can be tutored to excel in
this
 field In my opinion, talent has a role to play in becoming a great artist,
nevertheless
 factors
such
 as discipline,
interest
, and practice can make even a non talented
child
 achieve greater heights It's a fact that inborn gift has a role to play in climbing the ladder of excellence, particularly in areas of sports.
However
, innate ability without proper guidance, constant practice and correction cannot guarantee success, as
such
, all factors should be put into consideration in an outstanding performance.
For instance
, my cousin had a natural ability to play the guitar since age 4, he took lessons and underwent a series of training prior to a national competition he recently won in Ghana.
Thus
, in order to climb the ladder of success, a collaboration of talent and hard work must be considered.
On the other hand
, a
child
 with no natural incline, who is properly learnt in music or games has a very high chance at becoming great. Though, there must be a high threshold of
interest
 and love in order to withstand any challenge that may arise.
For example
, my little niece who loves ballet spend a lot of time practicing and she's great at it, as she recently won the gold prize for a competition held two weeks ago. In conclusion, talent is of utmost importance, but in itself cannot guarantee excellent results as compared to a non gifted
child
 who is likely to be greater due to the
interest
, self denial and quantity of hard work put together. In my opinion, innate ability should be collaborated with
interest
 and effectiveness.
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