Ordinary people try to copy famous personalities by seeing them on TV or reading about them in the newspapers.Why do they do this?Do you think it is a good idea to copy famous people?

Caring the elderly can be extremely difficult due to many reasons. The
first
and foremost, most of the family members are not
trainned
shaped or conditioned or disciplined by training; often used as a combining form
trained
well to care
these generation
Suggestion
this generation
. Apart from
this
, in many homes may not have necessary facilities to meet older
peoples
Suggestion
people's
requirement,
similarly
, they may not have adequate financial background to treat them effectively.
By contrast
, several
family
Suggestion
families
think that, older people have paid their taxes,
therefore
, they must be looked after by the
goverment
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
itself.
However
, opponents of the above argument point out that, even though the elderly are cared by experts in care homes, they cannot be feel happy as they are not surrounded by loved ones. There are some studies reported that older generations feel much better when they are nurtured in their familiar surroundings rather than in
oldage
Suggestion
old age
homes.
Additionally there
Accept comma addition
Additionally, there
is
also
a viewpoint states that these older people cared not only their children, but their
grand children
a child of your son or daughter
grandchildren
as well,
therefore
, now, it is the
responsibilty
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
of children to look after own parents when they are in their later years.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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