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Caring the elderly can be extremely difficult due to many reasons. The

first

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and foremost, most of the family members are not

trainned

shaped or conditioned or disciplined by training; often used as a combining form

trained

well to care

these generation

Suggestion

this generation

. Apart from

this

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, in many homes may not have necessary facilities to meet older

peoples

Suggestion

people's

requirement,

similarly

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, they may not have adequate financial background to treat them effectively.

By contrast

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, several

family

Suggestion

families

think that, older people have paid their taxes,

therefore

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, they must be looked after by the

goverment

the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit

government

itself.

However

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, opponents of the above argument point out that, even though the elderly are cared by experts in care homes, they cannot be feel happy as they are not surrounded by loved ones. There are some studies reported that older generations feel much better when they are nurtured in their familiar surroundings rather than in

oldage

Suggestion

old age

homes.

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Additionally there

Accept comma addition

Additionally, there

also

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a viewpoint states that these older people cared not only their children, but their

grand children

a child of your son or daughter

grandchildren

as well,

therefore

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, now, it is the

responsibilty

the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force

responsibility

of children to look after own parents when they are in their later years.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

177 words

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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You have arranged to visit a friend in England but an important event at home now means that you must change the dates of the visit. -Write a letter to your friend.

Children today play very violent games. This must be the reason for the increase in violence and crime in most major cities of the word. What are your opinions on this:

Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

Some people think that government should spend on medical facilities whereas other people think that investing on transport is necessary. Discuss both views and give your opinion.