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Fresh water has become a golbal problem for the world.What are the causes of it? what meaaures government and individual should take to resolve to the problem? Give reasons and e.g for your answers

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Caring the elderly can be extremely difficult due to many reasons. The
first
 and foremost, most of the family members are not trained well to care
this
 generation. Apart from
this
, in many homes may not have the necessary facilities to meet older peoples’ requirement,
similarly
, they may not have adequate financial background to treat them effectively.
By contrast
, several families think that, older people have paid their taxes,
therefore
, they must be looked after by the government itself.
However
, opponents of the above argument point out that, even though the elderly are cared by experts in care homes, they cannot be feel happy as they are not surrounded by loved ones. There are some studies reported that older generations feel much better when they are nurtured in their familiar surroundings rather than in old age homes.
Additionally
, another viewpoint states that these older people cared not only their children, but their grandchildren as well,
therefore
, now, it is the responsibility of children to look after own parents when they are in their later years.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Irrigation
  • Water scarcity
  • Contaminants
  • Desalination
  • Drought
  • Water conservation
  • Aquifers
  • Water footprint
  • Rainwater harvesting
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