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Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What is the cause of this? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand?

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The global requirement for
food
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 has been on an increasing trend.
This
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 essay will highlight causes of
this
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 critical issue. It will
also
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 discuss the important measures that the international bodies can resolve the fleeting supply.
Firstly
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 the main cause is
increase
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increasing
 in population, the pace at which global population is increasing is alarming is not able to match
upto
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up to
 the same of
food
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 cultivation and production. To illustrate certain countries which less powerful in terms of their economy are not able to import in sufficient quantities.
Secondly
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 the fact that global warming is witnessed by many continents is affecting the climatic conditions need to harvest certain crops.
For
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example draught
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example, draught
 conditions
at
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in
 many African countries are making it almost impossible to farm rice paddies. Many international authorities have been trying to resolve
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 gory concern.
To begin
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 with the introduction of
mid day
the middle of the day
midday
 meals
are
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is
 able to draw a parallel between educating and having a prospective supply towards
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viod
everything that exists anywhere
world
field
word
 towards poorer sections of the society.
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 the waste management system in many countries
have been
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has been
had been
 able to ensure that the wastage is less and much focus is on the way the produced
food
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 reaches towards the needy. To explain the impact of cooked
food
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 distribution is an example for which the global institutes have been able to find
solution
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a solution
solutions
the solution
.
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this
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 has been one of the gory problems of the 21st
century
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century, this
this
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 can be tackled with a better insight on the production & distribution of
food
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.
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Global
 global warming has seen a high

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