Today people can work and live anywhere they want, because of the improvements in communicant technology and transport. Do advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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It is true that in

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advanced era, it becomes possible for individuals to do

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the job

a job

and stay in any sphere of the world due to advancements in telecommunication and automobile sector.

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trend in

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culture has been criticized due to having some drawbacks

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I strongly believe that it is far beneficial for workers as well as employers. On the one hand, there are some downsides of

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technology

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Firstly

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this

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modern

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results in inclining sedentary lifestyle among

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the masses

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becomes the reason of health issues like obesity

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hyper tension

a common disorder in which blood pressure remains abnormally high (a reading of 140/90 mm Hg or greater)

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working at home

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deter the people in developing certain skills like leadership qualities

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team collaboration

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problem solving abilities

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as on

work

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premises employees get

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a chance

the chance

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collaboratively with their superiors and inferiors

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, excessive dependence on

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also

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makes

users handicapped

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users, handicapped

in some situations like any failure in

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the network

a network

may lead the life to

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stand still

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automobile industry

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the automobile industry

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intensified the consumption of natural resources and pollution level when whole the globe is suffering from the scarcity of these valuable sources.

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, there are enormous benefits of

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changing trend in

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work field

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the work field

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and foremost, it makes available diversified job choices for the individuals as they can

work

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for any company around the globe which was not possible in earlier days.

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kind of

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culture

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helps in reducing the unemployment

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as applicants are not confined to

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in their own nation.

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, modern wireless

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has made life easy and comfortable with providing flexible working hours and multitasking

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result people

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result, people

nowadays are having much time to spend with their family members.

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but not least,

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advanced

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has put some

halt

a form of energy that is transferred by a difference in temperature

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on brain drain and urbanization

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as people do not need to migrate to

another

not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied

other

cities or countries for job. In conclusion, no doubt

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cutting edge

technology

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alienate

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the people from one another, I believe that it is proving a boon for the humanity.

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Today people can work and live anywhere they want, because of the improvements in communicant technology and transport. Do advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Details of politicians’ private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In some countries, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. what are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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