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Some people think that a good diet and exercise are not necessary for a health and long life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Correlation of exercising and clean eating with age and healthy
life
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 is often argued about. Some agree with the idea of opting for a balanced diet and engaging in
exercise
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 to ensure healthy and long
life
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; while others reject it. In my opinion, both
exercise
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 and healthy eating are mandatory for enjoying a healthy and long
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. Personally, I completely endorse the idea of "We are what we eat".
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 implies that our food intake contains nutrients to help our
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 stay fit; based on these food choices we can either strengthen or damage our vital organs. Would a person, whose daily alcohol, nicotine or tobacco intake exceeds the minimum requirement set by the World Health organization,
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 able to enjoy a disease free long
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? Sadly the answer is No. Needless to say, food choices play a vital role in not just strengthening but
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 sustaining our
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 for years to come. In my opinion, apart from healthy diet the
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 essential contributor for living a healthy and long
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 is physical
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 routine.
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 factor alone helps in enriching our
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 with the essential oxygen required to fuel our organs.
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, from my own personal experience, I am confident that
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 builds stamina and muscle mass. If I compare my
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 strength from the years when
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 was not part of my
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 to my current lifestyle, with one hour of daily
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, I can see major changes in terms of gaining muscle strength and increased stamina. I am confident that
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 change has helped me in enjoying a healthier
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 which may
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 longer due to
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 positive development. To conclude, some researchers may link health and
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 sustainability with genetics;
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, I believe that one can certainly add elements like balanced and
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 in his
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 to ensure a healthy and long
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.

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