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Some people think that a good diet and exercise are not necessary for a health and long life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Correlation of exercising and clean eating with age and healthy
life
 is often argued about. Some agree with the idea of opting for a balanced diet and engaging in
exercise
 to ensure healthy and long
life
; while others reject it. In my opinion, both
exercise
 and healthy eating are mandatory for enjoying a healthy and long
life
. Personally, I completely endorse the idea of "We are what we eat".
This
 implies that our food intake contains nutrients to help our
body
 stay fit; based on these food choices we can either strengthen or damage our vital organs. Would a person, whose daily alcohol, nicotine or tobacco intake exceeds the minimum requirement set by the World Health organization,
be
Suggestion
is
is being
 able to enjoy a disease free long
life
? Sadly the answer is No. Needless to say, food choices play a vital role in not just strengthening but
also
 sustaining our
body
 for years to come. In my opinion, apart from healthy diet the
second
 essential contributor for living a healthy and long
life
 is physical
exercise
 routine.
This
 factor alone helps in enriching our
body
 with the essential oxygen required to fuel our organs.
Moreover
, from my own personal experience, I am confident that
exercise
 builds stamina and muscle mass. If I compare my
body
 strength from the years when
exercise
 was not part of my
life
 to my current lifestyle, with one hour of daily
exercise
, I can see major changes in terms of gaining muscle strength and increased stamina. I am confident that
this
 change has helped me in enjoying a healthier
life
 which may
last
 longer due to
this
 positive development. To conclude, some researchers may link health and
life
 sustainability with genetics;
however
, I believe that one can certainly add elements like balanced and
exercise
 in his
life
 to ensure a healthy and long
life
.

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