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Both the poor and the rich find accessibility into university difficult. Do you agree or disagree?

#accessibility #university
A
university
 education is important because it equips you with the skills and knowledge required to succeed at certain types of jobs.
However
, admission into the
university
 can prove difficult for both the poor and the rich.
To begin
 with, you need to meet the requirements for your course of interest and
this
 can vary depending on the school of choice. Despite meeting the requirements, admission is not guaranteed as there are other factors that go into the decision making process.
For instance
, community service, volunteering or sports activities you were involved in at high school. The fate of a prospective student seeking admission usually lies in the hands of the admissions committee who do not know your financial status which rules out
favoritism
an inclination to favor some person or group
favouritism
. There are
also
 private and government funded scholarships available to prospective students who need help funding their
university
 education. All in all, studying hard, getting good grades and
also
 participating in extracurricular activities should be the aim of every student rather than depend on their wealth to make accessibility to
university
 any easier.
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