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compare fertility rates in different countries. discuss both views and give your opinion

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The presented graph depicts the
fertility
rate
, defined as births per
woman
, in the Gulf countries during the years 1990 and 2000. The countries included in the study were Bahrain, Kuwait, Qatar, Oman, S.Arabia and UAE. As we can see from the following data, in 1990 Oman had the highest
fertility
rate
, followed by S.Arabia. The country with the lowest
fertility
rate
 were Bahrain and Kuwait. In 2000, despite a
decrease
 in
deftility
rate
, Oman and S.Arabia still had the highest
fertility
rate
 of over 5
birthes
the time when something begins (especially life)
births
breaths
birds
 per
woman
. Bahrain and Kuwait,
droped
let fall to the ground
dropped
 to an average
fertility
rate
 of less that 3 births per
woman
. When comparing the
decrease
 in
fertility
rate
 between 1990 and 2000, we can see
decrease
 in all countries, ranging from 0.75 to 1.5. The
larsegst
above average in size or number or quantity or magnitude or extent
largest
 decline was recorded in Oman, from an average of 7 births to only 5.5. Kuwait had the slightest
decrease
 in
fertility
rate
, from 3.5 to just under 2 births per
woman
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fertility rates
  • Overpopulation
  • Economic challenges
  • Aging population
  • Labor shortages
  • Cultural norms
  • Healthcare access
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Developed vs. developing countries
  • Family planning
  • Childcare support
  • Gender equality
  • Sustainable development
  • Reproductive choices
  • Empowerment
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