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some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that
music
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 is Best
way
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 to contact people different
culture
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 as well as ages.I
am completely disagree
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completely disagree
 with
this
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 statement because
music
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 not best source to know the
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
nations
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nation's
culture
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 On the one hand, by
music
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 people can rejuvenate their mind and
music
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 give knowledge about
language
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 of
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 nations and
it
it is
it's
 not best for uneducated persons because mostly
music
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 sang in their own
language
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 so that why
this
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 not helpful for other
nation
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 people. Apart from
this
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, people prefer to their own
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language
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language, music
music
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 and they know about the meaning of
music
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. On the
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 hand
,
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,
some people argue that it is
best
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the best way
way
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 for people to contact with another
nation
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. With the help of
music
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 people
ehance
increase
enhance
 their knowledge and know about the
language
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 of another
nation
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, they show interest in their
music
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 and feel fresh. To sum up, according to me
music
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 is not
best
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the best way
way
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 to contact people with each other and to know the
culture
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 of
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
nation
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.
Accept space
.
 Many other best
way
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 to know the
culture
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 of another country

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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