You live in a room in college which you share with another student. However, there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In the letter, • describe the situation • explain your problems and why it is difficult to work • say what kind of accommodation you would prefer Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am a student living in the college accommodation, writing here to explain some difficulties I am facing about the arrangement
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and ask for possible assistance. Let me explain the situation I am having at the moment. I stay with another
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student in a
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him, including but not limited to playing games at late night loudly, putting smelly clothes everywhere, kept rotten food in the
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the day. Yours sincerely, Josephus Yang

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