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When recruiting a new employee, the employer should pay more attention to their personal qualities, rather than qualifications and experience. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your opinion and include relevant examples.

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The recruitment process in an organization is usually a difficult one. Admittedly, some people believe that hirers need to concentrate on certificates and how long a potential employee have spent on a job rather than individual traits. The essay will argue why I completely disagree with the opinion.
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 with, it is completely understandable why certain persons will campaign for personal qualities rather than qualifications,
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 may be because it is often said that attitude is everything.
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, working in an office setting there is the need to interact with your colleagues and having a good personality helps in the communication process.
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, attitude does not get the work done. Having qualifications and experiences that match with the tasks at hand is much more vital than personal qualities.
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, being successful at what we do most of the time depends on training we have had and how often we have performed specific tasks.
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, a survey carried out by work ethics school in Denver, Colorado in 2001 concluded that 80% of the best staff usually had a foul attitude. To illustrate
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, one of the most successful scientists of all times, Albert Einstein, who was a recluse did not particularly have the best personal qualities but that did not stop him from being one of the best. To Conclude, as much as personal traits are important in workplaces and amongst colleagues, I completely disagree that it should take the place of the length of time and the degree obtained by being the deciding factor as regards employment.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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