The restoration of old buildings in major cities around the world costs enormous amounts of money. This money would be better spent on providing new housing and road development.

It is common that major cities spend millions of dollars
on
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for
the restoration of old buildings all over the world.
Although
, to some extent, I think that repairing old buildings is beneficial for improving the reputation of cities, I do agree that the majority of a government’s budget should be spent on building new houses and developing infrastructure. Undoubtedly, old buildings are normally the soul of a city, they not only reserve a city’s
culture
but
also
attract tourists. A good example of
this
is Government House in Sydney. It is true that Sydney government has spent a large amount of money on it,
this
building is a crucial
culture
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cultural
asset and helps the public to understand Australia’s identity and
culture
by offering excellent 19th and 20th century furniture, paintings and a botanic garden. Actually, Government House is one of the
first
choices for primary students to understand national history,
culture
as well as various types of plants.
Besides
, as a distinguished
culture
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cultural
heritage site, thousands upon
thousands
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thousand
tourists visit
government house
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the government house
from all over the world every year.
which
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Which
in turn boosts total consumption and the social economy.
However
, I do not support
this
on-going expenditure. Indeed, cities like Sydney have spent multi-millions dollars on repairing or reserving old buildings, which occupy huge spaces but nobody works or lives in there. If
this
money had been spent
instead
on the construction of Sydney light rail
for instance
, it would have been in-effect
last
year, and in turn, traffic issues would have been released in the Sydney CBD.
This
would result that there is
much better life experience
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a much better life experience
than we currently are. Given that some private companies can operate and restore old buildings on behalf of governments as long as the companies can get the benefits from selling tickets, why do not governments transfer their part of responsibilities to them, so that governments can spend more of their budgets on infrastructure development which has
obviously
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obvious
influence
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influenced
on the lives of residents. In conclusion, as everyone love cultural heritage, human’s thirsty on preservation of old buildings
is
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are
unquenchable. It is time,
however
, for private corporations to invest, and for governments to focus on developing infrastructure and residential buildings.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical significance
  • Urban charm
  • Tourism
  • Revitalizing the economy
  • Aesthetic appeal
  • Environmental sustainability
  • New construction
  • Urban development
  • Infrastructure
  • Cost-effective
  • Long-term benefits
  • Immediate needs
  • Living standards
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