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Essay topics: As a result of electronic inventions such as the computer and television, people do less physical activity, and this is having a negative effect on their health. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Several new electronic inventions in the 20th century were
computer
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 and
television
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. In the past, people had more activities and didn’t get their activities with high technologies. Nowadays, the inhabitants are very familiar with the technologies. In the developing countries, each other to compete and create new inventions which have a negative and positive effect in the future.
Computer
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 and
television
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 are used almost everybody in the
world
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. It is hard to imagine what things would be like today without them. Everyone is using computers for business and pleasure. Computers are very helpful some people doing their jobs. Many offices, universities, schools, supermarkets and the other places need a
computer
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. With
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, make people do many works easier, you can watch video, play games, and
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 browsing the internet. Computers are
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 used by medicine in the hospital. Now and in the future, medicine needs
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 technology to support their activity.
Television
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 is one of the
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entertains
 everyone who necessary to relax, laugh, and find news. Almost every householder in the
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 has
television
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. Every day people spend their free time with
television
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 and it is already influencing human in the
world
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. Sometimes they spend their leisure all day for lazy and make us body overweight.
Computer
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 and
television
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 have influenced and affected our everyday life. It is made inhabitants do less physical activity and
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 make a tremendous impact on our lives.
Human
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A human
 who
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is
 always in front of the screen, will give bad effects to the body and eyes.
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The body
 will feel stiff muscles, and the eyes will feel irritation.
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, it’s made bad our healthy. In conclusion, I agree because people who often use computers and
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 make people do less physical activity, and
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 is having a negative effect on their health. Indeed, everybody in the
world
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 needs a
computer
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 and
television
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.
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, sometimes we are remembering that we must be to exercise before and after use it.
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