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The Graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kindom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the levels of carbon dioxide emitted by an average person in four European countries — United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal — starting from year 1967 to 2007. The graph clearly demonstrates how
UK
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the UK
 and Sweden have been successful in curbing their CO2 emissions over the past half-
century whereas
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century, whereas
 Italy and Portugal have failed to do so and have been contributing an ever increasing share of CO2 in the environment. In 1962, UK was the biggest emitter of CO2 releasing more than 10 metric tonnes into the atmosphere, closely followed behind by Sweden. Italy’s emissions equalled less than half those of
UK
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the UK
 and Portugal had a meagre share at a little more than 1 tonne of CO2 for an average person.
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 figure increased
for
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in
 all countries by 1977 except for
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the UK
, which had a little decrease over
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 time period. In the following ten years, Sweden had a large decline in CO2 emissions. UK released lesser CO2 too, albeit only marginally, but Italy and Portugal dumped greater amounts of
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 gas over their past. By 1997, Italy had surpassed Sweden in CO2 emissions, the latter was able to assert more control in reducing the same. Portugal was responsible for rampant CO2 release during
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 period, eventually superseding Sweden after 10 years, which had acted the most responsibly by steadily lowering its CO2 emissions over the preceding four decades. By 2007, UK was still the biggest producer of
CO2
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CO2, although
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 there was a slow decline over the years. Italy and Portugal both released greater amounts of CO2 in the decade following 1997, but at a slower rate than ever before.
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