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In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to large shopping centres or malls to do their shopping. Is this a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, cities around the world have been seeing the number of local stores being decreased due to a strong trend towards shopping at bigger malls.
This
 essay will explore the reasons for that and explain why
this
 development is actually improving the overall purchasing experience. To start with, the majority of big shopping centres around the country offer a plethora of different brands, big and small, in a variety of departments,
such
 as clothing, sports gear, electronics, and so on. That business model not only amplifies competition between shops, given they are all on the same physical space, just a few steps away from each other, but
also
 force owners of these stores to explore all sorts of strategies to attract consumers' attention.
For instance
, nowadays it is common to see huge sales events and clearance offers spread throughout the year,
in contrast
 to only on special
ocassions
something you have to do
occasions
,
such
 as Black Friday.
As a result
, families can get cheaper prices and better products. Another advantage of big malls is that they usually help develop the whole neighbourhood around them. Given the convenience of having all sorts of stores and services being offered at a single place, there is
also
 a tendency for families
to look
Suggestion
look
 for ways to live closer to these centres.
Therefore
, local entrepreneurs have the opportunity to open small businesses,
such
 as bakery shops and pharmacies, in the vicinity of these shopping areas. If these big venues did not exist, shoppers would be forced to travel to different city areas,
thus
 reducing the likelihood of discovering all the options available at their disposal. In conclusion, society should not look at the decline of local shops as a negative development, but
instead
 as a consequence of increasing competition and as an opportunity for a more efficient, cheaper and pleasant shopping experience.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail outlets
  • consumer behavior
  • shop locally
  • convenience
  • variety
  • economic growth
  • job creation
  • community
  • personal touch
  • small businesses
  • local economy
  • big corporations
  • dependence
  • shopping habits
  • urbanization
  • globalization
  • competition
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