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some people think that children should only read academic book. other believe that reading books for pleasure is equally important. Discuss both views and give your opi nion.

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 think reading is good for their
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.But different
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 of
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 have
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different
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opinions
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.Some of them think
children
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 should only read academic
book
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books
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,and some of them believe that reading books for pleasure is equally important. In my opinion,absolutely reading academic
book
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books
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 can let the kid know more academic knowledge.First,they can know more
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,
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also
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and also
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 understand professional knowledge like the
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behaviours
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plant
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 grow up and how the world
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.It can improve their academic literacy.
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academic
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 is really
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actully
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actually
 if the
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 do not curious
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 it,it is hard to put the
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thie
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their
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. It the other side,I think reading books for
pleasureis
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pleasure is
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 more important for
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.Because the
chrildren
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children
 can
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 what they want to read,so they think they have the right to choose.That
make
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kids
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 feel
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,
it
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 helps psychological development and
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emotionally
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them emotionally
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 healthy.
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 reading what the
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 like,
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 might
development
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hobbtes
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hobbies
.They can read all kinds of
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books
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,
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in
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 they will know what they
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interest
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 in.At that time,
parent
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parents
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 can help
children
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 develop their
stengths
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strengths
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 can make plans for the
children
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's future. So,I think the content of academic books is
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important
.But it is more important to meet
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children
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children's
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 interests.

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Coherence & Cohesion
Try to vary your sentence structure more to enhance readability.
Task Achievement
Incorporate more specific examples to support your arguments, which could make your points more persuasive.
General
Pay attention to spelling and grammar to ensure clarity and professionalism in your writing.
Structure
You provided a clear introduction and conclusion that effectively framed your discussion.
Content
You discussed both views as the prompt requested before providing your own opinion, demonstrating a good understanding of the task.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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