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For many, shopping malls are great places to spend their leisure time and meet others. People, however, in the past mostly visited those when necessary. To what extent do you think this is a negative trend? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Shopping malls, these days,
are considered
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were considered
 major recreational spots by
many but
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many, but
 people mostly visited them for necessity in the past.
This
 new trend has many negative impacts on youngsters and the society as a whole.
This
 essay will argue why it is completely unnecessary for people to spend their free
time
 in the marketplace and purchase things that they do not need at all.
To begin
 with, modern shopping complexes offer many amenities
besides
 products and shoppers tend to enjoy roaming around different markets and purchase whatever they like.
For instance
, after the end of a semester, students prefer to meet up in a shopping mall, watch a movie and later have snacks in the food court. They say
this
 reduces the stress of the exams and make them relaxed.
Besides
, with the reduction of open places and parks, many families gather at a large shopping mall to enjoy their holidays.
However
,
this
 is a negative trend and has health hazards. As a consequence,
the young
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the younger
 generation tends to forget the beauty of nature and the stress relief provided by the outdoor world.
This
, in fact, drains out the energy of the youth and makes them lethargic.
For example
, a walk in a park or a day in a beach refreshes the soul
more evidently
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more evident
 than a day in a mall. Due to the excessive affection towards shopping, many people become
shopaholics
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Shopaholics
 and get into debt. To conclude,
this
 essay argued why it is completely inappropriate for citizens to spend their free
time
 in shopping malls. In my opinion, people should not rely on shopping malls to spend their free
time
 and must enjoy their free
time
 in a much energetic and enthusiastic way and thereby creating a better society.

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