Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Modern technology is creating a single world culture. Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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modern
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has revolutionised the
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significantly, some
people
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argue that it is contributing to
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a homogeneous
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culture. I partly disagree with the above idea as modern
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allows us to interact with
people
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from different cultural backgrounds and makes us realise and appreciate our own unique
cultures
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.
The modern
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technologies
such
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as
internet
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the internet
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, television and mobile phones allow a wider connection and sharing of information among
people
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all around the
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.
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may mean that many
people
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follow the same trend and share interests, and
people
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are more likely to be influenced by the dominant,
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the
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cases, western
cultures
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.
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, a number of young Japanese
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listen to
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music
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and follow a fashion trend that originates from
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celebrities. If
people
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overly admire foreign
cultures
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and ignore their own traditions and
cultures
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, it may be possible that the
world
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becomes a single culture.
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,
people
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are more aware of their own
cultures
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and appreciate
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their
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uniqueness. In fact,
people
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travel to see different
cultures
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, enjoy local cuisine, and learn foreign languages, and it is the modern
technology
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that makes it easy to do these activities.
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interacting with
people
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from different countries,
people
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actually realise the uniqueness of their own
cultures
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.
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, I have learnt a lot about my own country ever since I have lived outside of my country.
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is because
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people
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are interested in other
cultures
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and I was asked many questions. I would have not been
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as proud
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of my own country as much as I
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now if I had not lived
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overseas. In conclusion,
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some
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concern
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that modern
technology
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leads to a
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single-world
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world
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culture, I believe that it assists in connecting
people
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around the
world
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and sharing different
cultures
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while
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appreciating their own traditions.

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