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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define and what factors contribute to achieving happiness?

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Happiness
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 is crucial for having a meaningful life. As it is not a universal term, it can be fairly challenging for it to be defined, because people do not usually think about what brings them joy as they experience it, but rather after it is over.
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 the path towards
happiness
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 could heavily depend on the individual, I think healthy relationships and
progress
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 towards a personal goal could really contribute to achieving it.
To begin
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 with,
happiness
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 is relative and temporal. People can have different backgrounds, goals and thinking.
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, one sole definition of
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 feeling cannot be correct. When it comes to personal thoughts, it is still difficult to describe, though, because on the whole people do not consider what makes them happy and what that feels like until
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 emotion is gone. Only when they deliberately think about it, will
happiness
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 possibly become more than just an association with different events in their mind, which is really hard to put into words. Two major steps towards
happiness
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 could be being part of healthy relationships and making
progress
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 on an individual goal.
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, having people to turn to and rely on can alleviate stress and sadness. But most importantly, even if suddenly peoples' whole lives turn around, the relationships they have built can
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 forever and help them find
happiness
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 again.
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, working on a goal or a dream and seeing
progress
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 could give people the confidence to think that their efforts and struggles actually have meaning and
as a result
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- make them happier. To summarise,
happiness
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 may be difficult to define because
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 word holds a different meaning for many people and the feeling is usually not considered until it is already gone. People need to find their own way to achieve
happiness
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, but trying to forge quality social connections and seeking
progress
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 regarding their personal goals could really contribute to
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 task.

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