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In recent years, some countries have experienced rapid economic development. This has resulted in much higher standards of living in urban areas but not in the country side.    This situation may bring some problems for the country as a whole. What are these problems? How might they be reduced?

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Due to sore in the economic
development
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 majority of countries have come up with higher standards of living in urban areas
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then
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than
 rural areas.
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 essay discusses about the main problem caused for farmers live in rural areas and provide proper solutions like improving
agriculture
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 to reduce the problems. The Foremost problem caused to farmers due to rise in economic
development
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 because most of the farmers will leave around the cities. They only depend on
agriculture
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, but people living in cities don't affect much because they will earn the same wages according to the standards and facilities around them. If there is sore in economic
development
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 the farmers living on
agriculture
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land
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 will have more effect because number of industries will accommodate in rural areas and the farmers, who were depended on
agriculture
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land
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 will face a crisis and
also
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 they are not habituated to that higher standard of living.
For instance
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, recently an article was published in the newspaper saying that due to the economic
development
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 many industries are expanding their business and occupying
agriculture
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land
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.
This
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 problem can be eradicated by following some measures like Government should not allow corporate companies to establish their industries in
agriculture
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land
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. Proper care should be taken
for
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from
 farmers to cultivate their
land
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 like providing funds or loans and
also
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 equipments which are required for farming. It should help them in their economic
development
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 by developing
agriculture
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land
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. By implementing these measures the defects can be minimised. Example a village near Nizamabad called Ankapur. In that place many people were encouraged to do
agriculture
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 and they don't allow any industries to
accomodate
be agreeable or acceptable to
accommodate
their
objective case of they
them
theirs
. To conclude,
their
in or at that place
there
 are several problems will
cause
put an end to a state or an activity
cease
 due to rapid economic
development
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 like effects on agricultural
land
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 and farmers. But
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not effect
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doesn't affect
not affect
 the people living in cities because of luxurious life they possess. These effects can be solved by taking some measures like restricting the industries to build
in
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on
 agricultural
land
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 and encouraging people to do
agriculture
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.
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