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Many people believe that increasing levels of violence on television and in films is having a direct result on levels of violence in society. Others claim that violence in society is the result of more fundamental social problems such as unemployment. How much do you think society is affected by violence in the media?

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Watching
television
are
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is
good recreational activity
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a good recreational activity
 that can bring a lot of pleasure. There are different kind of shows, cartoons, science fiction, documentary, etc. While it brings a lot of joy to us, some people put the blame of social
violence
 on
television
 and films.
This
 essay does not agree with that and believe it is caused by some underlying social problems, like low employment rate and low minimum wage.
To begin
,
violence
 exists long before the invention of
television
. It is not something suddenly
popup
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pop up
 after
television
 was created, but something came
with
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to
 mankind since we have record. There is a statistic from the British government about the crime rate in Britain, which shows that there is no statistical difference between the period without
television
 and the period after.
Secondly
, multiple psychological studies state that lacking sleep and frustration will greatly increase the
violence
 factor of a person. A person could easily be sleepless and frustrated If someone is having a confrontation with family or worrying about how to pay rent due to unemployment, which could lead to violent behaviour according to the study. Some people may claim that people will follow the violent act in films,
hence
 films are boosting the level of
violence
 in society.
However
, people should have a logical sense to judge what is right and what is wrong, as well as the ability to understand the consequence of behaving badly,
hence
 they will not be easily influenced by the violent behaviour and perform it themselves. To conclude,
violence
 in
media
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the media
 will not make the society more
violence
 as people in society have the ability to understand
violence
 in
television
 and films are wrong, and statistics show that there is no correlation between the crime rate and the widespread of the
television
.

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