Many people believe that increasing levels of violence on television and in films is having a direct result on levels of violence in society. Others claim that violence in society is the result of more fundamental social problems such as unemployment. How much do you think society is affected by violence in the media?

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good recreational activity

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a good recreational activity

that can bring a lot of pleasure. There are different kind of shows, cartoons, science fiction, documentary, etc. While it brings a lot of joy to us, some people put the blame of social

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and films.

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essay does not agree with that and believe it is caused by some underlying social problems, like low employment rate and low minimum wage.

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exists long before the invention of

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. It is not something suddenly

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was created, but something came

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mankind since we have record. There is a statistic from the British government about the crime rate in Britain, which shows that there is no statistical difference between the period without

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and the period after.

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, multiple psychological studies state that lacking sleep and frustration will greatly increase the

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factor of a person. A person could easily be sleepless and frustrated If someone is having a confrontation with family or worrying about how to pay rent due to unemployment, which could lead to violent behaviour according to the study. Some people may claim that people will follow the violent act in films,

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films are boosting the level of

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in society.

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, people should have a logical sense to judge what is right and what is wrong, as well as the ability to understand the consequence of behaving badly,

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they will not be easily influenced by the violent behaviour and perform it themselves. To conclude,

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the media

will not make the society more

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as people in society have the ability to understand

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television

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and films are wrong, and statistics show that there is no correlation between the crime rate and the widespread of the

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