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Many people buy new phones or laptops to keep up with the latest technology.Is this a good thing or bad thing?

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Updating phones and laptops to
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 latest version is a trend nowadays.
This
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 could benefit or harm you based on the necessities or circumstances of an individual. Purchasing latest gadgets just for pomp and show is totally a waste of money, time and resources. Your latest phone could fetch you a brief term of happiness and
fame maybe
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fame, maybe
 but
this
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 popularity would remain only
untill
up to, before the time
until
 one of your friends or colleagues
buy
Suggestion
buys
 a better version of the very same gadget you bought or maybe
untill
up to, before the time
until
entail
 a much sophisticated version comes out. Keeping up with trends when you can't afford it could make you end up losing your savings or push you into depression.
However
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, getting a laptop with brand new features which could ease your tasks at
office
Suggestion
the office
 or help ace your assignments at school could be a wise investment for the long term. In my opinion
,
Accept space
,
buying
latest gadgets
Suggestion
the latest gadgets
 "just for the sake of it" should not be
encouraged but
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encouraged, but
 if it can help you reach a goal like a promotion, better business opportunities or even get an "A "in exams, one should certainly go for it.

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