Achievements are an important part of a person's career, though some people believe that they are much more important than others. What do you feel is the most important factor of working?

Accomplishments are
essential part
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an essential part
of an individual’s
job
. Despite the fact, part of the society is of the belief that they are vitally important than others. The factors which have contributed to
this
statement
are
introduces an alternative
or
that
employee’s
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employee
motivation, and
job
satisfaction. I believe that achievements are important because it is tangible evidence that use to judge a person and more success or less. Because it makes the person to be happy at the
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
and
also
to have a healthy mentality and a balanced life. Achievements makes the employee to be more
motivate
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motivated
to
work
, since it improves the
job
satisfaction which leads to perform high quality
work
. When an employee
get
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gets
acknowledged by the staff it
make
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makes
a positive impact to peruse an interest in the
career
. In my point of view to achieve a goal within the
job
we have to
work
hard for it.
Ther
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There
are many consequences of working hard
.
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.
It improves the employee’s skills to handle
challenges
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the challenges
. To withstand in tough times and
also
resilience to
work
under pressure. Being able to
persue
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
parse
peruse
interest
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interests
in the
career
makes the
work
a sense of pleasure, pride and joy. The result of working happily at the
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
makes the employee less stress and it helps to maintain a proper healthy mentality.
For
example when
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example, when
someone is having
a
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an
interest in their
career
they are more able to achieve more goals and they will be
acknowledge
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acknowledged
by their
staff which
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staff, which
leads to be more motivated and to be successful in the
career
. In conclusion being able to achieve goals within the
career
makes the employer more motivated and it makes them more
job
satisfied and it leads to have a healthy pleasurable balanced working lifestyle.
This
writer believes that
achievements
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achievement
are
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is
an important part of
person’s
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a person’s career
the person’s career
career
.
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