In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

Significant improvement
are now seen
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is now seen
in agriculture field because of modern technology and hybrid
progeny but
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progeny, but
still
large portion
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a large portion
of people
are not finding
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is not finding
enough food to meet up their basic demand. By the hand of genetically modified
organisam
a living thing that has (or can develop) the ability to act or function independently
organisms
organism
(
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(
GMO),
production rate
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the production rate
has increased in vast amount compared to
past
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the past
.
Besides
, lots of high tech equipment
have come
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has come
had come
in
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on
into
the market
as a result
cultivating crops have now become too easy and comfortable now a days. Diseases resistant and stress tolerant plant
have add
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have added
positive impact in agriculture scenario. But it is too much shameful for us despite having
over production
too much production or more than expected
overproduction
of crops, lots of people are still in the below poverty line and so, they don’t have anything to eat. To find out problem behind
this
situation; I would rather say, in todays world, lots of people waste too much food; especially in
middle
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the middle
-east countries. They have the luxury to waste
huge portion
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a huge portion
of
food but
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food, but
that can be eaten by poverty stricken poor people.
Moreover
, in current days, we are facing lots of environmental
problem
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problems
, like; earthquake, heavy floods and because of
this
, crops in the field are being spoiled.
On the other hand
,
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,
day by day
,
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,
due to various
unkown
not known
unknown
and fatal plant diseases, we are not having enough crops in many areas. To solve
these problem
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this problem
these problems
, we need to come forward to the poorer countries by extending our helping hand. To have good crops in the field, immediate action should be taken to improve our environment and
also
, eliminate diseases ratio in plants should be minimized

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