In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

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Significant improvement

are now seen

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is now seen

in agriculture field because of modern technology and hybrid

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progeny, but

still

large portion

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a large portion

of people

are not finding

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is not finding

enough food to meet up their basic demand. By the hand of genetically modified

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a living thing that has (or can develop) the ability to act or function independently

organisms

organism

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GMO),

production rate

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the production rate

has increased in vast amount compared to

past

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the past

Besides

, lots of high tech equipment

have come

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has come

had come

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into

the market

as a result

cultivating crops have now become too easy and comfortable now a days. Diseases resistant and stress tolerant plant

have add

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have added

positive impact in agriculture scenario. But it is too much shameful for us despite having

over production

too much production or more than expected

overproduction

of crops, lots of people are still in the below poverty line and so, they don’t have anything to eat. To find out problem behind

this

situation; I would rather say, in todays world, lots of people waste too much food; especially in

middle

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the middle

-east countries. They have the luxury to waste

huge portion

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a huge portion

food but

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food, but

that can be eaten by poverty stricken poor people.

Moreover

, in current days, we are facing lots of environmental

problem

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problems

, like; earthquake, heavy floods and because of

this

, crops in the field are being spoiled.

On the other hand

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day by day

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due to various

unkown

not known

unknown

and fatal plant diseases, we are not having enough crops in many areas. To solve

these problem

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this problem

these problems

, we need to come forward to the poorer countries by extending our helping hand. To have good crops in the field, immediate action should be taken to improve our environment and

also

, eliminate diseases ratio in plants should be minimized

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Topic Vocabulary:

inequality
distribution
access to resources
climate change
natural disasters
political factors
economic factors
agricultural practices
infrastructure
transportation
population growth
education
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In spite of the advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this case? What can be done about this problem?

Fully explain your ideas

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