people in the current generation are not fit and active, which will cause dangerous problems in future. write about what could be the reasons and suggest solutions for issue.

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Current generation
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The current generation
is blessed with the most luxurious
life
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life, however
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,
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comes with a disadvantage that today's generation are not healthy and
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can cause a serious threat in the future. In
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essay we will discuss what are the reasons for these issues and possible solutions. There are multiple reasons for the unhealthy lifestyle of people. There is an increased competition among the people along with the greed to earn more to satisfy
needs
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the needs
. People are running in a rat race to earn money,
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, they have no time to take care of their body.
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, the eating habits of people have deteriorated
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more and more people are eating junk food which is causing health related issues.
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, a recent survey suggests more than 50% of youth is suffering from the problem of obesity related issues. Many developing countries do not have adequate infrastructure
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as gym, swimming pools which aid in keeping people fit. People can take up some remedial measure to avoid unhealthy lifestyle. People can do some basic workout at home or do some exercises to keep their body fit,
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, they can perform yoga to keep their body flexible. Another point to consider is people can change food habits rather than eating ready to make food products they can prefer eating fruits which will give them the adequate nutrients. Children should start playing outdoor
games especially
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games, especially
physically
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physics
intensive games which will burn the unwanted calories. To conclude, I feel that people are living a sedentary lifestyle these days the situation is going to worsen
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if we don’t take adequate measures to keep oneself fit.
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