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The traditional life style of local people in developing countries is attracting and increasing the number of tourists to the countries which has the effect of preventing local people changing to modern ways. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

November 13, 2019 GENERAL CONSULATE OF THE FEDERAL REPUBLIC OF GERMANY Inonu Caddesi 16-18, Istanbul Turkey Subject: Khwaja Walid
Sharaar
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, Afghanistan Passport No: O0365704, German National Visa for Master Degree Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
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 motivation letter as a part of the application for
German national visa
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a German national visa
 to study Masters
at
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in
berlin
capital of Germany located in eastern Germany
Berlin
. I was born in a family that appreciates the importance of
education
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. Since my
childhood I
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childhood, I
 had a passion for engineering and desired to become an engineer just like my father. I hold a Bachelor degree in software engineering issued by the Kabul University in my home country. I worked
at
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in
ministry
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the ministry
 of public Afghanistan for more than four years as a database Manager Assistant
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 promoted to
database manager
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the database manager
. I have an admission letter from Arden University in Germany for data analytics and information management systems and I’m looking forward to obtain a German student visa to study there. The Arden University is highly esteemed and I believe it will provide me with a well-rounded
education
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 to help me build a successful career ahead. I preferred Germany because it is one of the most technologically advanced countries in the
world
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 that has the
world
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's fourth-largest economy by nominal GDP. Their educational system is of high quality. Their dual teaching system, which combines theoretical learning and practical training, produces graduates who are well prepared for the
work
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 environment. The German government heavily invests in
education
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 and research, which accounts for DAAD (German Academic Exchange Service) being the
world
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's largest funding organization for international exchange in higher
education
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. Germany has been listed as the fourth safest country in the
world
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 for international
students according
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students, according
 to a survey conducted by the student room website.
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 but not least, more than 100 million native speakers, German is the most widely-spoken
first
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 language in Europe, and
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 the German language is becoming increasingly important in the global market. The professors and lecturers are accomplished and approachable researchers who enjoy working closely with students to help them reach their full potential. It possesses
modern infrastructure
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a modern infrastructure
 and laboratories equipped with the latest technology. My university maintains numerous collaborative contacts with various industries
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 that its students have little difficulty in finding eager partners for their projects, internships, or master’s thesis. The data analytics and information management systems program at
Arden university
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the Arden university
 of Berlin ranks very high as compared to other programs at other universities. The degree has a modular structure allowing students the freedom to choose from a range of modules according to their academic progress and focus area. The program is designed for students who intend to
work
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 for international companies in functions or projects which require a professional background as well as a thorough understanding of management practices. Graduates of
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 program have excellent opportunities for starting their careers and will continue to have good prospects in the future. I had the opportunity to
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 in the Health
sector especially
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sector, especially
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
 health data for more than four years.
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 is where my interest in data analytics issues developed. My degree is entirely related to
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 sector, I believe I have the relevant
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 experience and passion to succeed in
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 field. As you can tell from my high school results, I am generally a very good student.

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