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Some people believe that nowadays we have too much choice. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #choice
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This days there are
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To this day there are
This day there are
 people that think that we have
manu
a quantifier that can be used with count nouns and is often preceded by 'as' or 'too' or 'so' or 'that'; amounting to a large but indefinite number
many
 choices. I agree with
this
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 statement. We live in a world that we can choose to do everything we want.
For
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Use synonyms
example if
Accept comma addition
example, if
 you want to change your job us very easy
this
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days
Suggestion
day
, or if you want to improve your skills you just need to go and apply for more trainings, as before was quite hard as people could judge you. Another
example
Use synonyms
 that I can give is my own
example
Use synonyms
. Because I wanted a better life for my and my family, we choose to leave Romania and we moved in
UK
Suggestion
the UK
. I will not say that was
a
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an
 easy
way but
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way, but
 for us was the best
think
a special situation
thing
 that happened to us. There are times when you have
to
to a degree exceeding normal or proper limits
too
 many options you do not know what to choose, and you make the wrong decisions. Young people that choose to have more freedom,
for
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example
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, can end up taking drugs just because they did not choose right. Overall, I think
that is
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 a good think that we can choose very easy
nowdays
Suggestion
now days
 and we have the change to give
ourselfs
reflexive form of "you"
yourself
 a
second
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 change.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • decision fatigue
  • myriad
  • dissatisfaction
  • regret
  • paralysis of action
  • empowers
  • preferences
  • innovation
  • competitiveness
  • fosters
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