You saw an advertisement for a tennis course in England but you have one or two problems and can’t stay the whole course. Write a letter to the course director. In your letter: explain your interest in the course describe your problems find out if a refund is possible
Dear Mr. R,
I hope you are in radiant health. My name is Lisa, a student in your 9th batch summer tennis
course
. I am writing this
email with a disheartening feeling that unfortunately due to
an emergency, I am not able to finish the course
.
Moreover
, I know it’s a three-month premium course
and leaving it in a month is quite disappointing. However
, I am always fond of tennis that’s why I came to England to gain the proper training and instruction. With a long face, I have to go back to Canada, where my parents need me most. Additionally
, I am an only child, and my father is undergoing major surgery. Hence
, he wanted to see me before going to the operation
theatre.
Replace the word
operating
On the other hand
, my mother’s condition is getting bad, as she is handling all the medical formalities by herself. Consequently
, it’s high time to stay with them and already booked the return ticket.
Further
to this
, I paid the course
fee in advance during registration. It would be highly appreciated if you could refund half of my payment. I am looking forward to hearing from you and anticipating a positive response.
Yours sincerely,
LisaSubmitted by Lisa Bhuiyan on
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coherence cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, make sure each paragraph focuses on a single idea. For example, the second paragraph can be split into two – one addressing your passion for tennis and why you joined the course, and the other detailing your emergency situation.
coherence cohesion
Your letter is generally well-structured but can benefit from clearer topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to clearly indicate what each paragraph will discuss.
task achievement
You have provided a complete response by explaining your interest in the course, describing the problems, and inquiring about a refund.
task achievement
You used a suitable, polite writing tone throughout the letter, which is appropriate for the context.
coherence cohesion
The letter opens and closes with appropriate, polite greetings and salutations, which adds to a positive impression.
Contractions
Formal and informal language refers to using different forms of language in different settings.
In informal writing, you can use contractions such as I’ll and Сan’t.
In formal writing, you should write I will and Can not.
Do not use exclamation mark in formal writing, but you can use it in informal writing.