Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on people. Do you agree or disagree?

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The daily use of the

computer

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can have more negative than

positives

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positive

effects on people. I

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as yourself

personally

agree with the statement until one point.

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with

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the statement I can say that

useing

an act that exploits or victimizes someone (treats them unfairly)

using

the

computer

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for long periods of times can give you back pain and can damage your eye vision.

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the people that work in offices are encouraged to stand up and have a small walk every hour so they do not have back pain. Another example that I can give is that doctors

recomand

push for something

recommend

to use glasses when using the

computer

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useing

an act that exploits or victimizes someone (treats them unfairly)

using

the

computer

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for long times can have a negative impact as people will not have time to make friends or see the friends that they already have and they become very lonely. People that play on

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computer

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the computer

a computer

will

star

take the first step or steps in carrying out an action

start

living in a virtual live and have virtual friends and in time will start to close in them

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as they will refuse going out as they are

captiveted

strongly attracted

captivated

by the

computer

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Moreover chlidren

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Moreover, children

Moreover children

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this

plural of "this"

these

days enjoy spending time

indoor

within a building

indoors

playing on

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than outside, where they can play and interact with

others

not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied

other

children. Some people think

that is

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very bad to use

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computer but

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a computer, but

a computer but

the computer but

computers but

there are people that think that using

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computer

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a computer

the computer

is very

usefull

being of use or service

useful

and give the chance for people to have a posh

live

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life

. Overall I personally think that using

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computer

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a computer

the computer

is a good choice as long as is not becoming

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obsesion

an irrational motive for performing trivial or repetitive actions, even against your will

obsession

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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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243 words

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Using a computer every day can have more negative than positive effects on people. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message

The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The school library is seeking applicants for a job over summer break. Write a letter to the library’s manager, in your letter include: – A brief introduction of yourself – Your experience and relevant skills – Why you want the job