Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission outweighthe diadvantages ?

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There are a lot of museums that are charging a fee for admission where others are not.
In
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addition I
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addition, I
personaly
as yourself
personally
can say that people will choose to go and see a museum if is free of charge as they will
preffer
like better; value more highly
prefer
to keep the money and buy other things with them. As an
example I
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example, I
can say that
famillies
a social unit living together
families
with more children will go and visit a free charge museum
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then
conjunction used in comparatives
than
going to a museum where to have to pay. The money that they do not spend they can buy a snack for the children or other things.
On the other
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hand there
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hand, there
are people that think that the museums where is a fee to pay, there are more thinks to see and are places that are more
intresting
arousing or holding the attention
interesting
, is not
allways
at all times; all the time and on every occasion
always
true.
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Furthermore I
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Furthermore, I
personally
belive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
that most of the museums
shoud
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
be free of charge as in that way more and more people can visit and enjoy more places and even learn more about culture and history.
Such
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as, there are more schools that
are taking pupils
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pupils are taking
to
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on
trips so they can see and start enjoying the museums and make the
courious
beyond or deviating from the usual or expected
curious
cross
chorus
about the past.
Moreover
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, there are people that think that the
entrace
something that provides access (to get in or get out)
entrance
entries
entrails
of the museums should be free at least for people till 18 years old. Overall, people
shoud
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
visit more often the
museums even
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museums, even
if they are free or not.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • admission fee
  • operational costs
  • funding new exhibits
  • visitor experience
  • accessibility
  • inclusivity
  • educational impact
  • cultural preservation
  • tiered pricing system
  • revenue generation
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