Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngsters under of 18.Some psychologists claim that children these days are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant example from your own knowledge or experience.

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, it has been said in some research articles that, it is in fact the people who are responsible for the upbringing of their children that neglect to teach the nececas
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, parents do not spend enough time at
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children, which
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, parents these days focus more on running behind money and leave their kids alone at
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with no one to show love and care. One of my uncle's
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used to play violent video games all day long and
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took a huge turn in his life as a grown-up as he committed a serious crime recently, and is in jail
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why, the supervision, love and care is extremely important for a person from a very early stage in his/her life.
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, teachers fail to teach certain important human traits in school and purely focus on the syllabus materials. To be more specific, teachers these days are more inclined towards finishing up their subject materials than disciplining their students if they happen to misbehave in class with their friends or with other teachers. My 7 year old son,
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, had been constantly bullying another student in his class in front of his class teacher for a long time, and
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matter did not get to my ears until the affected student himself
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unfortunate situation could have been clearly avoided. In conclusion, I strongly believe that it is the duty of both the parents and the teachers to mold a
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with their children on the parents
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